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Fetus In A Jar


Why do you starve me of affection?
Sliced open.
Bandage soaked,
Raped soul specimen under blue light detection..
I'm a little horny and a little insane,
Fishing for the ring you gave me that slipped
down the drain.
This morning..it happened this morning, didn't it?
Five past three,
I was dead to everyone--dead to the world,but
then you found me.
Bliss only lasts as long as it can burn,
Smoldering in a pile of rotten fruit skins.
Heart ripped out,
And the man I love stands in the corridoor
laughing at me..
Why do you do this to me? Unfetter the chains
that bind me firm,
I've got you caught in my chain linked fence
of a mind..twitch..squirm.
You torture me in the same way--I am the little
girl that didn't know any better,
And I let you untie my pink ribbon and expose
my bare chest..I was pure until I met you.
Why do you starve me of affection?
Sliced open.
Bandage soaked,
Raped soul specimen under blue light detection..


Sushanna
i just wrote this last night.
i'm not sure why.
i got a feeling of rejection though
when i read it again to myself.
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cinny Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2004
Wow, this whole piece is amazing

I'm a little horny and a little insane,
^That's definetly one of my favorite lines.

Bliss only lasts as long as it can burn,
Smoldering in a pile of rotten fruit skins.
^Did something for me too.

Great work! *thumbs up*

+fav
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xxannaxx Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2004
thank you very much! :hug:

this is one of my favorite poems..
it makes me happy when others are happy. :nod:

*content* :pray:


:heart:
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gensanity Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2004  Professional Traditional Artist
hrmmmm. I like

I really do appreciate your writing anna..its both inspiring and fuffilling. Glad your in my presence :D
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xxannaxx Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2004
^^;

it warms my heart every time you say such things...
i am glad to be in your presence as well.. :heart:

maybe one day i can make that a literal statement.. ;)

:butterflytwo:

~ aNNa
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nocturniquette Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2004  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i love how unapologetic your work is...
you never illustrate a feeling and then show remorse for having shared it...and that makes your voice resonate.
the imagery is startling at times...but it seeps into my brain and takes me where you mean for me to go...
thank you for every journey, anna...
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xxannaxx Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2004
no...

thank YOU! :pray:


:heart: ^^; :heart:
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nocturniquette Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2004  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
so lickable :P
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xam1814 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2004
wonderfully expressive piece, very strong.
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musicobsessed Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2004
amazing piece. An unborn child is a child no less.
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sumajarong Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2003
No words for how incredible this is +fav
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noctambula Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2002
wow

amazing piece of you

Heart
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cultstatus Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2002
we could start a new religion in that catholic heaven .
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pisschrist Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2002
i read it again~
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pisschrist Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2002
very nice indeed, a fav
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aphextwin Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2002   Writer
lovely. going into my fav's
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xxannaxx Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2002
thank you so much for all of the comments ^_^

i really don't know what else to say :) (Smile)
i'm speechless.
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verbalize Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
wow this just blew me away you have an amazing talent .
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fatelessmirror Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2002

Banal carnality. ;) (Wink)

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casualtea Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2002
I'm impressed. Damn, I've read a lot of pain/rape/abandonment poems and this managed to NEVER sound whiny or cliche.. good job. Great rhythm, rhymes, and phrases.

"I'm a little horny and a little insane,
Fishing for the ring you gave me that slipped
down the drain."

"Bliss only lasts as long as it can burn,
Smoldering in a pile of rotten fruit skins."


Those were especially fresh to read.
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